anyone blink182 fans? welp, i wrote lyrics about a girl i liked off the tune of blinks song "stay together for the kids".

tell me what you think...

verse1:
she disappeared one day
i was hopeing to get laid
she left me there, a lonely boy
what was I to say?

verse2:
she used me for a while
I just didn't care to know how
I loved her truely, then she screwed me
and im still pissed off

chorus:
so have a nice day
Hope you enjoyed those times
you really fucked with my brain
after that night
i wanted to end my life,
please stay out of sight
just go away

verse3:
she wanted to get with my buds
it really made me nuts.
I wanted her happy while I felt crappy
It made no sense at all.

verse4:
She teased me everyday,
she must have thought i was gay
she made me nervous, she was gorgous
She was one hot babe.

chorus:
so have a nice day
Hope you enjoyed those times
you really fucked with my brain
after that night
i wanted to end my life,
please stay out of sight
just go away

me and a group of friends are going to actually make a song out of some of these lyrics once we make a original tune.

hey Moff this looks good... but listen, i'm a songwritter, i wrotte a lots of songs till now. So if you want any fuckin good lyrics just let me know and i'll send you some then you choose if you like em. Unpublished lyrivs of course.

bp

ahhhh... i've heard this story so many times. the girl that fucked with the guy's head and totally fucked him over. it sucks.. i know. just remember, not all of us girls are evil bitches. most are, but not all. oh- and when you finally find a nice one, don't totally fuck her and her family over. it's not a nice thing to do. especially when you know the person for 6 years and then end up acting like a total fucking ass. errr.. sorry. guess my own fucked up relationship kinda came into the story there.

fleshy

maybe it did but you're right fleshy, that's how it always goes, just as you said. Girls are pretty bitchy when they find out that a guy loves em, they enjoy fuckin around with boys, but you know what, good for them cause since some guys are such a weakers that can't even handle a girl then they really deserve that. LADIES TURN...

c'mon boys, show em what you've got !!

bp

I wub yew fleshy!

hey black^pimp dude... send all the lyrics you want or have, i really want to adjust and work on some songs.

hey moff! havent talked to you in a while,

i like the song moffesto, you should try recording it as is, and let us hear it

awwww.. i love you too gizmo!

Umm, in my opinion those are pretty immature lyrics. "I was hoping to get laid", if that's all, then you didn't really love her like you say later on. "She must have thought I was gay." How does that figure? If she fucked with your brain, she obviously knew you liked her, therefore not gay because you like a girl. "She was one hot babe." Now there's a good reason to love a girl. Sorry if that was mean, but I'm sure you could do a better job of writing lyrics. Also, trading lyrics? That makes a song fake because you aren't saying how you feel, you're saying how someone else feels. A song is supposed to be about your feelings, so write your own lyrics.

lol, Mornse, he wrote it from a Blink 182 song, what do you expect?

heheh... woot...

HAHA agreed...

lol, mornse... my first draft of my very first song.. i couldnt think of anything else at the moment.

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Originally posted by Curse:
lol, Mornse, he wrote it from a Blink 182 song, what do you expect?
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Blink is great... tho alot of their lyrics arent great.

Thats the kind of music im trying to make ... the whole "punk rock" fun idea.

Im currently working on a fast pace song that makes fun of smokers and tobacco and all that shit. It will prolly sound alot like blinks "blow job" song, or queens of the stone age "fell good hit of the summer"

Benzene, ammonia, Acetone, Tar...
Might as well inhale exhaust from your car.

Thats what im working with.. black pimp.. email me at moffettmann@hotmail.com w/ lyric ideas. and mornse... you can help revise if u'd like as well. All the lyrics dont have to make sense but i do wanna change that gay part, lol.

hrmm.. why make fun of smokers?? dammit.. i smoke! and ya know.. it's a proven fact that people with depression are more likely to smoke. all us depressed people are just self medicating with tobacco. but hell.. it works better than taking fucking pills... although i still have to take 4 pills every day for the rest of my life.

i was depressed for a long time... it was actually over the chick i wrote that first song about. lol. I didnt do pills when i was depressed, i did em before and after. Smoking is horrible.

http://www.quit-smoking-stop.com/harmful-chemicals-in-cigarettes.html

great website about it. where im picking out alot of lyrics.